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Essay One Final Draft

Essay One Final Draft

Q As detailed in our Course Syllabus and Essay One assignment page, you must properly submit your final draft of Essay One by 11:59 p.m. CST on Monday, January 31, per the following directions. Be sure to upload your essay as a .doc or .docx file. Directions for Submitting an Essay via Canvas • Click on "Submit Assignment" above (on the right-hand side of this page). • Click on "Choose File" (under the "File Upload" tab) to locate your saved final draft (then click "Open"). • Click to check the box next to the following statement: "I agree to the tool's End-User License Agreement. This assignment submission is my own, original work." • Click on "Submit Assignment" to submit your saved final draft (please be sure the document is saved and then submitted as a .doc or .docx file). Once you have a chance to review these directions, please let me know ASAP if you have any questions. Late submissions are subject to our class's late work policy, as detailed in the course syllabus. Please do not finalize and submit your essay until you have reviewed all feedback provided by your peers (via our Peer Review Discussion Board) and from me (via comments to all Essay One preparatory work). Please also review the "Bonus Opportunity: Essay One: Personal Review" linked HERE before finalizing and submitting your work. Rubric Essay One Final Draft Essay One Final Draft Criteria Ratings Pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeMLA Formatting and Length 28 pts Exemplary Correctly formats title, header, heading, spacing, margins, and font AND reaches proper length. 21 pts Accomplished One element done incorrectly AND reaches proper length. 14 pts Developing Two or three elements done incorrectly AND reaches proper length. 7 pts Beginning Four or more elements done incorrectly AND/OR fails to reach proper length (points deducted proportionally). 28 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeIntroduction and Conclusion Paragraphs 24 pts Exemplary Intro. is focused and interesting, provides clear context for the rest of the essay, and effectively hooks reader; AND concl. summarizes essay and reiterates thesis thoroughly and well. 18 pts Accomplished Intro. is somewhat focused and interesting, provides some context for the rest of essay, and/or hook could be improved; AND concl. summarizes essay and reiterates thesis. 12 pts Developing Intro. is present but underdeveloped, provides little context for the paper, and/or fails to hook reader; AND/OR concl. makes insufficient reference to thesis. 6 pts Beginning Intro. is weak or unclear and/or does not provide context for the paper/seems irrelevant to narrative; AND/OR concl. seems unrelated to the rest of the paper and/or weak or unclear re: thesis. 24 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeThesis Statement 8 pts Exemplary Provides a clear, effective “roadmap,” clearly notes points discussed in each body ¶ (at least 3), clearly specifies the main topic, is one sentence in length, AND concludes intro paragraph. 6 pts Accomplished Provides general “roadmap,” notes points discussed in each body ¶ (at least 3), specifies main topic, is one sentence in length, AND concludes intro paragraph. 4 pts Developing “Roadmap” is vague/unclear, notes all points discussed in each ¶ but not aligned with topic, fails to clearly specify the main topic, may be longer than one sentence or a sent. fragment/run-on/c.s., AND/OR may be misplaced. 2 pts Beginning Stated thesis is unclear or non-existent, fails to note all points discussed in each body ¶, includes a focus that is off-topic, is longer than one sentence or sent. fragment/run-on/c.s., AND/OR misplaced. 8 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeBody Paragraphs - Organization 16 pts Exemplary Unified body paragraphs clearly address the topic, all topic sentences are clear and align with thesis point/main idea, AND all summary sentences are effective. 12 pts Accomplished Unified body paragraphs address the topic, only 2 topic sentences are clear and match thesis point/main idea, AND only 2 summary sentences are effective. 8 pts Developing Body paragraphs address the topic but not clearly, at least two topic sentences are unclear and/or do not align with thesis, AND 2 or more summary sents. are unclear. 4 pts Beginning Body paragraphs fail to address the topic, two or more topic sentences are non-existent, AND/OR two or more summary sents. are absent. 16 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeDevelopment/Support 30 pts Exemplary Effectively develops all body ¶s with sophistication and originality; extensively uses relevant personal stories/examples to explain and support ideas in all body ¶s; evaluates content, draws conclusions, makes connections well; demonstrates superior understanding of overarching concepts/essential ideas; AND effectively indicates public resonance. 22.5 pts Accomplished Effectively develops all body ¶s; uses some relevant personal stories/examples to explain and support ideas in all body ¶s; evaluates content, draws conclusions, and makes connections; demonstrates an understanding of overarching concepts and essential ideas; AND/OR notes public resonance. 15 pts Developing Effectively develops at least 2 body ¶s; uses some relevant personal stories/examples to explain and support ideas in only 2 body ¶s; draws few conclusions and makes few connections; demonstrates some understanding of overarching concepts and essential ideas; AND/OR makes insufficient reference to public resonance. 7.5 pts Beginning Fails to well develop body ¶s; uses few or no personal stories/examples to explain and support ideas in at least 2 body ¶s; few or no connections/conclusions are made; demonstrates a basic understanding of overarching concepts and essential ideas, AND/OR unclear or non-existent reference to public resonance. 30 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeCoherence 16 pts Exemplary Effectively uses proper transitions AND presents a coherent, logical flow of ideas that aligns with thesis. 12 pts Accomplished Uses proper transitions AND/OR presents a mostly logical flow of ideas that aligns with thesis. 8 pts Developing Uses no/improper transitions in up to ½ of essay AND/OR has several lapses of logic/fails to align all ideas with thesis. 4 pts Beginning Uses no or improper transitions in ½ or more of essay AND/OR has an absence of or under-development of ideas/fails to align ideas with thesis. 16 pts This criterion is linked to a Learning OutcomeLanguage Use and Mechanics 28 pts Exemplary Carefully chooses and arranges all words to promote ease of reading; has no sent. run-ons or fragments; has limited errors in spelling, grammar, word order, word usage, sentence structure, and punctuation; demonstrates good use of academic English; AND does not use 2nd p voice at all. 21 pts Accomplished Carefully chooses/arranges words to promote ease of reading in 3/4 of essay; has 1-2 sent. run-ons or fragments; has few errors per page in spelling, grammar, word order, word usage, sentence structure, and punctuation; demonstrates very few problems using academic English; AND/OR uses 2nd p voice once. 14 pts Developing Choice and arrangement of words inhibit ½-¾ of essay; has 3-4 sent. run-ons or fragments; has several errors per ¶ in spelling, grammar, word order, word usage, sentence structure, and punctuation; uses informal language in multiple sentences; meaning of text obstructed; AND/OR uses 2nd p voice sparingly. 7 pts Beginning Choice and arrangement of words inhibit ¾ or more of essay; has 5+ sent. run-ons or fragments; has many errors throughout in spelling, grammar, word order, word usage, sentence structure, and punctuation; meaning of text often cannot be discerned; AND/OR uses 2nd p voice repeatedly 28 pts Total Points: 150 PreviousNext

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